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« Thread started on: Aug 17th, 2006, 12:23am »

Okay...Here goes. This chapter is pretty short, but this is a work in progress...heh plz tell me if it sux! And if you like it you could always tell me that, too smiley

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Spyro and The Sea Dragon~Chapter 1


"Well, Hunter, this is it." Spyro said as he walked up onto the front step of their vacation home. "I guess Moneybags hasn't been out to check on it for a while. No wonder he rented it out to us at a discounted price."

"You don't say." Said Hunter while cautiously walking up onto the porch, trying not to step on any weak boards. Spyro gave the porch swing a nudge and had to dodge it as it came crashing towards the ground.

"It could be worse..." Spyro said, "At least we have a good view of the beach from here."

"That's true," Hunter replied, "But it will be sort of hard to enjoy while we're trying not to fall through the floor." Hunter got a little uneasy as a board cracked beneath his foot, and he jumped a bit when he saw a board snap in half after Spyro poked it.

Spyro laughed, "Aww, c'mon buddy, I'll race you to the beach!"
"You're on!" yelled Hunter, and the two sprinted down to the beach. "Dangit I forgot my running shoes AGAIN!" Yelled hunter as they sped down the path.

"I win!" Shouted Spyro as he skidded to a halt at the shore, just short of landing in the water.
"Aww, you cheated." Said hunter with a roll of his eyes and a flick of his tail.

When Hunter looked back at Spyro to see why there was no funny comeback, he saw Spyro simply staring at the water with a glazed look on his face and a little bit of drool coming out of his mouth. He looked hypnotized. He started blowing little puffs of smoke out of his nose and swaying back and forth in some kind of zombie-like trance.

"Spyro...Yoohoo? Anybody in there?" Hunter snapped his fingers in front of Spyros face a few times, and then slapped him accross the face.

"What the heck was that for?" Shouted an angry Spyro. He was still blowing puffs of smoke out of his nose, but these were on purpose.
"You were all in a daze like you were hypnotized or something, dude. It was freaky!" said Hunter.
"Yeah, whatever." Said Spyro "Lets go for a swim."
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And that is the end of chapter 1! Tell me whatcha think...plz? smiley I know it's short but it will get better...promise!
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« Reply #1 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 2:23pm »

Interesting start I like it but I am not going to say it sucks even though I like it.
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« Reply #2 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 3:15pm »

well...I'm glad you like it...but why would you tell me it sux if u like it...i dunno...i must've worded something weird...ok, anyway...thanks smiley
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« Reply #3 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 3:28pm »

I think it's pretty good. Interesting yes. But you could work on the transitions between scenes a bit. Otherwise it's great! keep up the good work! wink
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« Reply #4 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 3:41pm »

Looks good so far... smiley
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« Reply #5 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 4:23pm »

Well...okie dokie then....like I said..Its a work in prgress...so don't be surprised with flaws like what Spyro said about scene transitions and stuff...eventually I'll get around to fixing stuff like that...okay...now who wants to read chapter 2?

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Spyro and the Sea Dragon~Chapter 2

"Did you do it, Aqua?"

"Yes my queen, it should only take a few hours before he's...he's..."

"Yes. Good job little one, we may just make a proper sea dragon out of you yet." Said the queen, with an evil glint in her eye. The queen was the oldest sea dragon in the Atlantean Realms , and she was one of the few elders who remembered being cast out of the Dragon Realms.

"Your Highness," said a nervous Aqua, "Are you sure that you want to do this? They cast us out thousands of years ago, and none of them really even remember it, I'm sure."

"You ignorant little girl!" the queen bellowed, "I should have gotten rid of you years ago. Do you not know why they cast us out? It was because the knew we were stronger than them! They knew that we should have been the ones kicking them out! They wanted rid of us before we showed them what we were truly capable of! We are the most magical of all dragons, and they didn't respect us! Oh but they will learn to respect us when their villages are singed and their homes are destroyed! When their perfect little hero turns against them...Muahaha! Revenge is so sweet!"

"I understand, Your Highness." Said Aqua. Aqua was a young sea dragon, and she didn't feel too comfortable with many of the queen's evil schemes, but she had no choice but to help her. The queen forced her to use her psychic abilities to carry out her plans, and if she didn't, the queen would have her mother and her sister killed. Aqua loved her family and had no choice but to keep them safe.

"Now run along, I have much to plan for the next few days and I don't need you hanging around here distracting me." said the queen.

Aqua swam off as fast as her tailfin could carry her, and didn't stop until she reached he favorite place in the sea, the coral reef. She swam into a small alcove in the coral and curled up. "How did you get yourself into this, Aqua?" she thought. She hated the queen, and Imagined herself sneaking into the palace at night and hypnotizing the queen in her sleep to stop enslaving the people of Atlantea and to leave the Dragon Realms be. "Yeah right." She thought. She was too small and young to be a hero, and besides the queen was too magical to be affected by her powers.

Aqua was so deep in thought that she didn't even notice that she was falling asleep.
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Meanwhile:

"I don't know Spyro...You know I don't like getting my fur wet."

"Hunter you big baby, you'll dry. Now come on! It's great!"

Hunter stuck the tip of his paw in the water and immediately pulled it back out.
"But it's so cold!" he said. The hair on his back stood up just thinking about getting in. "How about you let me run home and get my wetsuit, huh?"

"Nope, now get in!" Spyro ducked under the water and came back up close to Hunter, splashing him and getting him all wet.

"Awww man, I guess I'll get in..." Said Hunter. He started to tiptoe into the water when Spyro snuck up behind him and shoved him in face first. When Hunter cam back up coughing Spyro said, "Serves you right you wussy little Censored cat! You're really wimpy, even for a scaredy-cat!"

"What's with you?" Hunter said, as he tried to shake the water out of his fur. Spyro knew Hunter didn't like water, and would never do something like that. Hunter was really confused.

"Whoa, Hunter, are you okay?" Spyro suddenly asked, like he didn't even remember pushing Hunter in.

"Well, did you expect to be okay after you pushed me in the water and called me a scaredy-cat?" Hunter asked angrily, still trying to shake off the water.

"What?" Spyro asked, "You're acting a little weird today, buddy." Spyro walked back up to the beach and rolled in a grassy patch to dry off.

"I'm going back up to the cabin." Syro said, "See you there later."

Hunter got up and went sit on the beach. He watched Spyro walk up and go into the cabin. "What is with him today?" Hunter asked himself as he stretched out for a little cat-nap.

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Well...that's chapter 2...tell me whatcha think...is it getting any better? Worse? Oh yeah and Thx for reading!
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« Reply #6 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 4:46pm »

It's getting better by the minute.

Oh and by the way you said if you like it you can also say it sucks to.

So that's why it was confusing for you.
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« Reply #7 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 4:53pm »

^Oh ok thx for clearing that up smiley What I mean was that if you liked it you could say that you liked it instead of saying it sucked.
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« Reply #8 on: Aug 17th, 2006, 4:55pm »

Now your confusing me undecided

Any way good story keep up the good work
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« Reply #9 on: Aug 18th, 2006, 3:28pm »

haha...thanks Emerald Wang, and sorry I confused you. Okay...time for chapter threeeee!

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Spyro and the Sea Dragon~Chapter 3

"Good morning little one." Said one of the queen's guards as Aqua woke up in an unfamiliar place. "The queen was worried when we found you asleep so far away from home. She thought you might have been trying to run away, and we wouldn't want that now would we?"

"Darn it," Aqua thought, "I couldn't have spent all night out there...could I?" Aqua looked around and realized that she was in the dungeon. She always wondered what it looked like down here. Unfortunately it was worse than she imagined. Chains everywahere and not a single window to let in some light. She tried to move, but found that her tailfin was chained to the wall behind her. There was mold and algea growing all over the place, and there was a nasty smell like rotten eggs mixed with chum.

Aqua sighed and setteld in, as she figured that she would be there a while. She watched the last bit of light disappear as the guard left the room and closed the door behind him. She tried to get in a comfortable position, but it was hard when her tailfin was chained up above her head and she was barely able to reach the ground. She reached down to the floor and felt for anything that she could use to pick the lock on her chain. She couldn't find anything, but she did find something long down there covered with slimy algae. She picked it up to examine it, and she couldn't tell what it was. She poked it, sniffed it, and then..."OUCH!" It bit her. She soon realized that the slimy thing was an eel, and flung it across the room, at what happened to be the exact same time that a guard was opening the door.

"What the bloody hell was that?" Shouted the guard as the eel smacked into his face and then fell to the ground with a plop. He paused for a moment to regain his composure, and then swam over to Aqua.

"I don't know what kind of trick you're trying to pull, but you better watch your back. You never know when my knife could happen to..erm...slip." The guard pulled his blade out of its sheath, and held it up menacingly. He covered up Aqua's mouth and raised the knife with an evil grin. "I never did like you dragons with more magic than the rest of us...always causing trouble and showing off..."

Another guard soon swam in to see what was taking so long. "What is going on in here?" he asked as he saw the first guard aiming his knife at Aqua's throat. He was obviously of a higher rank than the guard who had just threatened Aqua because as soon as he swam into the room, the other guard put away his knife and started stammering about how he was just coming in to bring Aqua to the queen and how he needed his knife to help pry open the shackles.

"I don't know what you're doing with that knife, Shark, but I can guaruntee that if I ever see you in here again, the queen will hear about this little incident. You know she wants the girl to stay alive as long as her services are needed." The second guard swam up to Shark, as if to make a point that he was much bigger and stronger. Shark backed away in fear.

"Get out of here, Shark. NOW!!!" shouted the second guard, and he pointed his knife threateningly at Shark as he exited the room.

The guard swam over to Aqua, and she was a little scared of him after seeing how he had just scared of such a big mean dragon like that. She thought that he must have a reputation for being violent, or tough, or several other things that Aqua didn't really want to think about as the guard got closer to her.

"Sorry about that, little one." Said the guard as he unchained her tail. "The thing you have to remember is that Shark's bark is much worse than his bite. Oh yeah, I'm Jet by the way. Now Let's go down to the queen before she has both our heads."

"Well, at least he's nice to me...which is more than I can say for most people here..." Thought aqua as she waved her now free tail around, swishing it through the water.

"You ready?" said Jet as he grabbed her by the arm and pulled her down the hall. Aqua tried to pick herself up off the ground and swim alongside but he was just going too fast, and Aqua wasn't exacly athletic, so she allowed herself to be dragged along the floor untill they finally reached the queen's throne room.

As soon as Jet opened the door a delicious smell filled Aqua's nose, like fried salmon, seaweed soup, and many other delicacies. The queen must've just finished her daily feast, which she would not share with anyone, no matter how hungry they were. Aqua's stomach growled a bit as she realized that she hadn't eaten since lunch yesterday. "A bit of breakfast would be good." She thought, but there was no way of getting it when the queen was in charge.

"Your Highness," said Jet, "I have brought you the young one, as you asked."

"Thank you, Jet. That will be all." The queen dismissed her guard and then turned to face Aqua. "So, little girl, I hear you've been trying to run away from me. Decided that you want to be friends with that idiot purple dragon and his Kitty Cat friend up there, have you? Well let me tell you something, If you do anything to interfere with my plans to crush those dumb dragons, I'll have your head, and your family's too, and you get to watch!"

Aqua shivered at the thought of having to see her sister and mother beheaded. "But your highness," she said, "I wasn't trying to run away, I had merely fallen asleep in the reefs and lost track of time. I truly am sorry."

"You foolish little child. If you are trying to hypnotize me into believeing that pack of lies, then you should think again. You know your pathetic little powers won't work on someone as well trained as I. For that I am sending you back to the dungeon, but first lets hear how our little dragon friend is doing."

Aqua wanted to make up a story and tell the queen that the hypnosis wasn't working, but she knew better. The queen would have her killed for telling such a lie, and the queen could tell by now when Aqua was lying.Of course, the queen always thought that Aqua was lying. Aqua tapped into Spyro's mind and soon began to tell the queen what was going on.

"The little dragon is beginning to become
the monster that you wish
and before long he will be under my control
so that you can accomplish
all the revenge and all the power
that you could ever seek
The dragon realms will be in your command
in a bit less than a week
however, my queen you should be warned
that your plans may soon fall through
as Spyro's feline friend is catching on
that something has gone out of true."
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"Out of true" haha that sounds pretty stupid but it actually means something to the effect of "Unlevel" or "not right" just in case you were wondering. I looked it up! smiley Thanx for reading, and tell me what u think! smiley
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« Reply #10 on: Aug 18th, 2006, 3:33pm »

Very good, very good. The story has a nice flow... you're off to a goos start..
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« Reply #11 on: Aug 18th, 2006, 4:50pm »

Awsome! Good chapter!
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« Reply #12 on: Aug 22nd, 2006, 10:25pm »

Ok...for anyone who might be interested...I am moving this story to fanfiction.net and I won't be posting anymore chapters here...I'll put a link when I get it all set up...
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